Pacing and detail of difficult scenes. The scenes where Averie expresses her anger and the flashback scene that hints at what the trauma was like all feel like unrealistic pacing to me on certain readings. I haven’t really nailed down the rhythm for how to write emotional dialogue, especially when the characters need to escalate into that emotion. I also still believe a version of this play could show the trauma more directly, but for this draft I focused more on Patti’s present struggle to communicate her guilt.